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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Thu Feb 14, 2008 11:13 pm

Good, please continue! elephant
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Post  EmbryH on Fri Feb 15, 2008 11:06 am

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Post  Axel3419 on Fri Feb 15, 2008 3:29 pm

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Chapter 2
The dreams. The endless dreams terrified me. They filled my thoughts, took over my brain, and pained my insides. Twirling around, I saw monsters. They were nothing like I had ever seen before; depictions of war and violence. Missiles and bombs, over and over. Coming towards me, I had no chance. I even saw the girl again, the same beautiful girl, except she was laying on the ground; disfigured, almost lifeless. I tried to save her, running towards her. Using all my strength to get to that girl, I sprinted. She had to stay alive; she had to. Yet suddenly I blacked out and awoke to my dreary room.

Sweat trickled down my face. The salty smell made my nostrils flair in disgust. My body was soaking wet, and tremendously hot. I was uncontrollably shivering. For all I know, I could have been on the verge of dying right there. After thirty seconds in complete terror, my insides burst upward. I tried to hold it in but couldn’t; and threw up all over the floor. Cringing, I fell back into my bed. The acid taste was overcoming my taste buds. Fortunately, I fell back asleep, and my pain vanished. This time, there were no dreams.

When I woke a second time, Dr. Robertss came in. He walked in a swift fashion, and slammed the door as he came inside. I jumped up and looked around. All remains of my “sickness” had disappeared.

Dr. Robertss looked down at me and spoke softly, “your body will get better at handling the tests as we go along.”
“I hope so,” I responded in that same croaked voice.

“It’s time for you to meet the other test subjects, 345.” He said almost smiling. I remembered my number was 00345, so I guessed that is what they called me. With that thought, I vaguely remembered something I had learned. Adolf Hitler came to mind, yet I couldn’t seem to retain any information about him, so I let the thought slip away.
“Follow me” Doctor Robertss commanded. And off we went.

We walked along this same hallway, until we came upon another similar passageway. While we were walking, I distinctly remember that there were no windows whatsoever, and all the light was coming from old-fashioned light bulbs. Because of this, I had no idea what time it was, or even if it was daytime.

We stepped in one of the doors on the second hallway, and came upon a fairly large room. It was circular, and there were people all around, talking and acting like normal teenagers. Yet, some of these people were young and some were much older. Half the people were girls. Between all of the kids, there was a wide range of nationalities and races. I thought about why we were all here, and decided to wait until the most opportune moment before asking.

“Here we are. Socialize if you must. We will call you for more testing in a bit. Goodbye for now, 345.” Dr. Roberts said. Afterward, he walked away, slowly yet strongly.

“Uhh. Hi. I’m 345.” I spoke loudly, surprising even myself. All of the people looked up surprised.

“You don’t have to call yourself by your number around us, kid.” said a teenage boy who looked around sixteen years of age. This guy had brown hair, dark eyes, and big muscles for his age. “Let me introduce myself. I’m Steven. We’re all in the same position as you, kid. Some of us have been around here for months. You are just the new kid. Don’t worry; there will be someone else coming in a few days or so; there always is.” He spoke confidently.

“Thanks. I’m Aric.” I spoke, sounding shaken up a bit.

“If you need help with anything, just ask.” Steven smiled. He looked like an older brother, or like a best friend would have looked.

“Wait. I don’t remember my past, and I wake up and they test me. I think I deserve a few answers!” I cried out with a smile.

“Okay. We are all stuck here. Day after day we do what they say. None of us remember our past, but we just deal with it. If you stay here long enough that is. Normally, we don’t tell every new kid about this, but…” He paused and took a deep sigh. “Sometimes, test subjects don’t return when being tested. None of us know what happens, we just don’t question it.” Steven finally said, with a sullen face.

“Wow! And I was just starting to like this place,” I sarcastically commented. I actually was terrified on the inside. I didn’t want to be like these kids, just waiting for their death. I wanted to take action, but I couldn’t just yet. First, I had to make a few friends.

“At least you’re being light hearted. I’ll introduce you to a few others.” Steven continued in the same concerned manner.

“Meet Rachel” he spoke. A tall girl, about eighteen years of age held her hands out to me. I shook her hand, and she started to talk.

“Welcome Aric. Don’t be too scared about what Steven says. He’s pessimistic most of the time. This whole experience is fun.” She said in an almost hyper manner. I could see that Rachel was one of those optimistic girls who found the good in everything that happens.

“Thanks Rachel” I said, with a sheepish grin across my face.

After talking to Rachel a bit, Steven introduced me to a few others. I talked to Max, a slightly weird young boy, around twelve years of age. I also talked to Mona. She seemed just as confident as Steven, and just as happy as Rachel.

After an hour or so, talking about basically nothing, Steven and I were called in by Dr. Roberts.

“Hello boys. Time for testing,” Dr. Roberts said in a monotone. We followed him into another large room, with much equipment, yet there was a ring in the middle. This ring had three horizontal strips which encircled a pad. We were both placed inside this pad, and wires were placed all over us, again.

“I’ve never had testing with another person.” Steven said with shock in his voice.

“I don’t have a good feeling about this.” I responded. My guess was right. When the testers were ready, Roberts started to tell us what to do.

“You each get one padded sword. Its not deadly, yet it will hurt. You two must fight each other, to the best of your ability until we tell you to stop. Ready?” Dr. Roberts said darkly

“What are you testing exactly?” I quickly asked with wide eyes and an open mouth. I was pretty sure that Steven could take me, so I wasn’t sure about fighting him.

“Sorry. We cannot disclose that information. It is classified.” Dr. Roberts answered.

“Don’t ask the doctors anything!” Steven advised. When Steven finished talking, Roberts told us to start fighting. We began.
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Fri Feb 15, 2008 8:58 pm

I'm gonna read this after I look over the other stuff. elephant
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Sat Feb 16, 2008 4:44 am

Hmmm, sounds ok, I wonder why he thought of Hitler, has hitler taken over the world and is now doing testing to make a truely Arein race? elephant
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Post  Axel3419 on Sat Feb 16, 2008 9:59 am

i like your theory Smile

but what do you mean by 'sounds ok'
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Sun Feb 17, 2008 9:46 pm

I just say that because i hate when people leave me hanging, it a great story, finish it up, please! elephant
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Post  Axel3419 on Sun Feb 17, 2008 10:59 pm

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Steven attacked first. His one-handed sword went straight towards my head. I blocked it with mine, twisted around and jabbed my sword at his left ankle. He jumped away and shouted.

“I’m sorry! We have to do what they say.” Steven then stroked it at my knee. It landed its mark, and I was down. Before he could go for another blow though, I rolled away and jumped back up. I still had my strength left, luckily, so I summoned up all my energy and knocked my sword at his left shoulder. They blow was too fast for him to notice, and it hit hard. Steven’s huge body went down, but not for long. As I watched him get up, I felt the throbbing pain in my knee. It hurt badly, yet I couldn’t do anything about it now.

Steven was on me like a cat pouncing at its prey. He jumped at me, and I dodged it easily. Steven was strong, but I was faster than him. I decided to use this as an advantage, but before I had the chance to knock him down, I was struck in the back. Steven had tricked me, pretending to pounce, but instead had stayed put, waiting for me to dodge it.

‘Fine. If he’s treating me like he would an enemy, I’ll do the same’ I thought to myself. I feinted left, and he dodged right. When he dodged I struck him across the cheek. Steven and I were both grunting and breathing hard. He stood up on one of the horizontal stripes and jumped down. I didn’t dodge, but instead held up my sword at his stomach. He fell right on top of it and cringed. I thought he was down for good. He almost was, but in one last act, Steven struck me across my head. I blacked out.

‘How many times can I black out in one day?’ I thought without opening my eyes. I felt an excruciating pain in my upper forehead. He had hit me hard, and I hit him hard.

“Are you awake yet, kid?” I heard the voice of Steven. When I opened my eyes, I realized that we were lying in opposite beds in one of the “resting corridors”.

“Yeah. What happened?” I murmured in pain.

“I don’t know. I fainted. This is what the corporation does to us.” He said with emotion in his voice.

“The corporation?” I asked questioningly

“That’s what we call them, the company.”

“How’d you learn to fight like that?” Steven continued

“I.. I don’t remember…” I answered.

After talking for a few more minutes, we both got up, and walked back to the “social corridor.” Rachel, Max and Mona were there. They looked just as bent out of shape as I felt.

“How’d you guys make out?” Rachel asked

“We didn’t make out.” I joked. Nobody laughed. I guess no one had a sense of humor around here. After telling Rachel what we were forced to do, she started to talk.

“That must have hurt, Aric. I had to run the treadmill again, for hours.”

“They made me run around the track.” Max spoke in with a squirrelly manner

“Does it really matter? They make us do this every day! Who cares what we have to do. All that matters is that we do it. We don’t have to!” Mona said firmly. No one talked for a few minutes, when Steven answered.

“We have to do this. They will kill us if we disobey” He said with a grim face.

“So what? We will die either way. Why don’t we give this a chance?” Mona argued.

“I think I agree with her” I added.

“What do you know? You are new” Steven said coldly

“Don’t be mean to him.” Rachel said like a mother would say

“Sorry Rachel. Sorry kid, I didn’t mean it.”

This went on for hours, us talking, until it was time to sleep. In the end we decided to think about it, but not to do anything until it becomes vital. Another doctor escorted me to the resting corridors, and I feel asleep instantly. I was exhausted, and I hurt.

The same dream. Over and over again, it played in my head. I didn’t want to watch the horrible movie. I saw people being killed, children being taken from their parents. I even saw a huge bullet coming straight for me. This couldn’t be real, just couldn’t be.

‘Life must not be this horrible, outside of these evil tests.’ I thought inside my dream. More terrors filled my mind. That girl. I saw the mutation of her. Except this time, I saw a younger boy crouching over her. As I looked closer at that boy, I realized that he was me. Though I didn’t know what I looked like, it had to be me. I didn’t understand what it meant, and I didn’t care. I tried to wake up. I kept willing myself to wake up, when finally I did.

SLAM. I jumped up.

The door slammed again, and I saw Dr. Roberts peering at me.

“Hello 345” Doctor Roberts sounded different today. Today he was more worried than usual. “We need to bring you for testing. Don’t worry, this time you will not be hurt.” He continued in the same worried manner.

We walked to a room, filled with scientists, which looked like a bathroom. There was a huge tub in the middle, which I laid inside. They started filling up this tub with thick water, and the machines around me started to turn on and spit out numbers. After the liquid got to the top, I felt a pretty large shock throughout my body. It hurt, yet definitely wasn’t as bad as the tests prior to this.

Another doctor walked in, who looked to be the “head” doctor, as everyone looked up and saluted when he came in. Though it wasn’t a traditional salute, it seemed different. All of the scientists in the room raised their right arm in a 45 degrees angle, and slightly sideways to the right. I had never seen that before in my memory, yet I knew that I had seen it before. I remembered it, but I didn’t recollect where it was from.

‘I wondered about that salute for a for a few seconds, but started to listen to the “head” chief’s conversation with Dr. Roberts.

“Mr. Lang” Dr. Roberts spoke in a quicker and higher pitch
than usual. “We have good news. The muscles have increased 45% since we started! That’s faster than ever before.” He continued with a slight smile on his face.

“It’s not good enough!” Mr. Lang shouted with his fist coming hard down onto his side. “You promised Location: 14 would be perfect!” he continued to shout

“We are almost there sir. These will be perfect” Dr. Roberts said, looking taken aback.

“They better” said Mr. Lang. Then he walked out of the room looking disgruntled. When I looked back at Dr. Roberts, he had a gaunt, apprehensive look on his face. I almost felt bad for him.
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:46 pm

They are getting so short Crying or Very sad elephant
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Post  Axel3419 on Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:47 pm

what do you mean? lol
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:48 pm

I mean they are getting shorter, lol. elephant
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Post  Axel3419 on Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:50 pm

do you want more? i have ALOT of these updates. b/c ive already written alot of the story. ha
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Mon Feb 18, 2008 12:13 am

Ok, ha. elephant
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Post  Axel3419 on Mon Feb 18, 2008 12:18 pm

no. i want you to beg Smile lol
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Mon Feb 18, 2008 8:04 pm

*Begs* Axel, dear Axel, may your feet never touch the dirt of our enemies....FURT!..I beg you you to let me read your humble novella....FURT!....Oh please Axel, you are a god among men....FURT FURT FURT!!! elephant
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“They measured my muscle mass too.” Rachel said. “Maybe they are testing how this all affects our body!” She exclaimed. “Maybe when we are done with testing, they will let us go back to our families!” She said in an even more excited manner.

“Don’t get yourself too excited. We might not even have a family to go back to.” Steven muttered. All of the test subjects today were talking about what had happened. Each and every one of hundreds of test-subject’s muscle mass had been tested. No one knew why they had done this, but people were now guessing about it.

“What if they want to make our muscles big so they can eat us! That’s why some of us disappear.” I heard one young test-subject guess.

“Maybe they want us to think that, but they are actually good scientists who are giving us an immunity to a virus!” another kid countered.

This went on for a while, but all I could think about was, why us? Why am I here, instead of living with my family? I’m stuck in this dark, gloomy, underground place. Yet, everyone just went with it, following orders, and doing what the scientists told them.

“If we all go against these scientists, we could overpower them.” I murmured to myself, but Mona heard me.

“Though we are all in the same situation, not enough people would have the guts. They control us!” she said angrily. I saw her thinking about what we could do.

“Let’s protest. Let’s escape!” I said with confidence.

“No. Not yet. We need to find their weakness.” She responded. “Let’s both look for any sign of limitation.” She finished. I agreed, and we spoke none more about it.

I looked back at Steven and saw him staring at Rachel. A beautiful stare, yet I couldn’t make out what he was feeling. I saw him go up to her and talk, and his eyes never left hers. It felt good, like something happy was going on in this horrible place. It was like he wanted her. It was what I had never experienced before. With that gleam in his eyes, I saw it. Steven loved her, and cared about her. He had lust in his eyes, and all I could do was just watch. It looked so right, so peaceful. In pained me to think, that because of this situation, it would probably be too hard to establish a relationship.

I felt so happy, yet so pained at the same time. I knew that if we got out of here alive, I would do anything to get them together.

“You see it to?” Max said. He appeared from nowhere, it seemed like. “They are meant to be together.” He said. Right now Max seemed so much more mature than I had ever seen him before, not that I had ever seen him for long.

“Yeah,” I said firmly. That was all I could say, for a tear slid down my cheek. I don’t know why this affected me so much, yet it did. Maybe, just maybe, this one little occurrence gave me hope. It without a doubt gave me hope, not of just Steven’s relationship, but of getting out of here alive one day.

When Steven finished talking to Rachel, I went up to him.

“I know.” I said resolutely. He looked up and didn’t say a word. “About Rachel” I finished. He still had nothing to say, so I got to the point. “You love her.” I said with a slightly quieter turn. He stared down at me with pained eyes.

“What if I do?” he said grimly. But after saying this, he started to almost look delicate, and emotion started to build inside of him.

“It’s… great. I mean, even though we don’t know what else to life there is besides this, you can still love someone else? I don’t really know why, but this gives me some hope.” I spoke softly.

“Well isn’t that great. Now you can write a romance novel.” He said sarcastically.

“Just answer me one question. I’ll make it simple. How much do you love her?” I asked.

“Why do you care? Fine, I’ll make the answer simple. I would die for her okay?. Does that help? Don’t mention this again, kid.” He answered in a serious, almost angry manner. After that, we didn’t talk anymore about the issue, but I could still see how he looked at her.
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Chapter 5
Doctor Roberts walked in again. I knew there was another test to begin. Whenever I see Dr. Roberts, I always expect the worst, and usually I am right.

“Test?” I asked almost sarcastically

“Yeah. You five, come.” Roberts said, pointing at me, Steven, Rachel, Max and Mona. We were all surprised that all five of us were being tested in the same room. I feared the worst. I guessed that we might have to fight each other, in a tournament of some sort. Unfortunately, this little assignment was much worse than that.

Dr. Roberts brought us into a small room, filled with a few chairs, and a mirror on one side. When I looked through the mirror, I realized how truly disgusting I looked. My face was covered in grime and dirt, and I had bumps and scratches all over. My hair was all over the place, and my face looked almost alien.
I would have kept complaining to my face, but Dr. Roberts started to talk.

“Your test. This won’t hurt a bit, for four of you.” He chuckled. “This test is a psychological exam, testing your cognitive reasoning skills. Your assignment is to collectively choose one person in this group to be “sacrificed” for scientific research. A.K.A. “killed”. You only have ten minutes to choose. Good luck, and I will come back in ten minutes to find out your decision. Let me be clear: If you do not choose in ten minutes, you all will be “sacrificed,” he said, in a monotone. Dr. Roberts stepped out of the room, closed and locked the door.

“No. NO! What is this test even for!? We can’t do this.” Max cried out.

“There is no point, and we have to.” Steven replied. After I heard his words, I summed up all my inner-strength.

“I’ll do it. It has to be me. I’m the newest, and I know the least about this place. You have to promise me something though. When I die, you all have to escape, no matter what.” I yelled, sounding much more confident than usual. I don’t know why I offered to be killed, I just knew that if it was me who died , then the rest of our group would escape.

“No. None of us has to die. We can escape.” Mona exclaimed, pulling on the door. Unfortunately, it was locked. “Damn!” she yelled. “What are we gonna do?” she asked with utter shock in her voice.

“The corporation can’t do this to us! They would never kill anyone! If one of us died, then their research would be useless, right?” Rachel said, trying to be sanguine about this whole situation.

“Maybe, but we can’t take the chance. One of us might be dying, and we have to choose.” Steven murmured. “And no more of this self-sacrificing’ crap. Lets take a vote.” He ended.

“ No. I can’t vote for someone to die!” exclaimed Mona and Rachel and the same time.

“Yeah. We can’t do that.” I shouted powerfully “Just let me go. Please.” I continued.

On our discussion went for ten minutes. Some of us wanted all of us to be killed, and others wanted to die themselves, but I had to make a move. I decided that when Dr. Roberts came in, I would tell him that we decided to kill me. I was all set at doing that, when my brain started to freak out.

What was going on? How could I kill myself? I mean, if I died, it would all be over, for nothing, without me even remembering what had happened before. I just realized what I was cornering myself into.

It didn’t matter though, because I was already stuck here day after day, doing the same thing! It wouldn’t matter if I died. Yet, somehow it would. No one would remember me, and what I stood for. I had to live. Yet If I died, I would be realized from this terror chamber! My brain was in a debate with itself. It was going to overload, and I was about to burst, when Dr. Roberts came in.

“Me. They chose me!” I shouted quickly, yet my voice wasn’t the only one I heard. As I looked around, I realized that Max had also spoken those same words.

‘Max?’ I thought. ‘Why would he sacrifice himself?’ I thought in total surprise

“Which is it? Who is going to die? You have ten seconds.” Dr. Roberts snarled

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“I have to die. It has to be me!” I shouted
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“No me! All of you have important things to do, but I’m no one.” Max yelled
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“You are someone! Just let me die, and you guys can escape!” I responded angrily
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“I’m sorry Aric. It has to be me. I’m… sorry..”
1. He jumped out of the room, pulled Dr. Roberts with him, and shut the door.

I felt like screaming.

“ I.. let a child die, because I was too selfish to die myself. None of us needed to die. This is terrible! What the hell is wrong with the world! I haven’t gotten straight answers since I woke up here! That’s it. I am going to find out. I vow, I will find out why we are here. No matter how much effort it takes, or how many sacrifices we have to make, I will find out” I yelled. I was shaking and shivering now. I felt like I did the first night I got here. I had to do something, or die trying.

When I looked up, Rachel was crying, and Steven was just looking at the ground.

“It wasn’t your fault. Look at us. None of us even talked when Roberts came in. You are a hero. Let Max rest in piece.” Mona said, with many deep breaths in between the words.

Then, for at least five minutes, all I heard were sobs from Rachel and my own heartbeat.
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Post  So_this_is_how_it_ends? on Thu Feb 21, 2008 10:08 pm

lol. Let max rest in piece
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You're just gonna drop the story?

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